I am a Year 9 student in the Uru Mānuka Cluster. This is a place where I will share my learning. Please note that some of it will not be complete, it will be my first drafts. Remember to be positive, thoughtful and helpful when you leave a comment.
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Friday, June 25, 2021
Tuesday, June 22, 2021
Essay #3
The 'ed' sentence
Try starting your sentence with the -ed form of the verb. H makes for a punchy start to a sentence.
Remember the rule: when you have finished your -ed phrase, place a comma then write the rest of the sentence.
Some -ed words-surprised, excited, angered, possessed, committed, electrified, undaunted, overpowered, concerned, horrified, concerned, delighted, enrolled.
Examples
-Determined to win, Troy pushed himself in last last meters of the sprint.
-Concerned for the well being of others, the Prime minister passed new laws.
-Horrified by the gore, I turned away from the screen.
-Surprised by my parents, I jump in the new car they just got me.
-Overpowered with the ball in my hands, I throw the ball at the last person standing
-Committed to my work, I finish first and get to have free time.
The 'Power' sentence
If you waffle a lot in your writing, try using a power sentence. Begin your paragraph with a power sentence of 12 words or less. Get straight to the point
Examples
-Money is the root of all evil (7)
-What is right, isn't always popular (6)
-She was elected as the president (6)
-He won his soccer game 1/4 (6)
-She did so well she got a pay rise (7)
-Running makes you tired (4)
Monday, June 21, 2021
Essay sentences #2
The 'W' sentence
Try starting you sentence with a 'W' word. There sentences make your work sound thoughtful and knowlegable.
Remember the rule:not every 'W' word works as a sentence starter. Remember to put your comma in when the parts of the sentence affected by your 'W' are finished.
Some 'W' words you can use: who, while, whilst, whereas, when, where, what, with, wham
Example:
-Whilst the teacher was talking, the students were pretending to listen.
-With a majority of the votes, hitler seized power.
-When the bell rings, we run to leave class.
-Whilst doing my work, I was listening to the teacher aswell
-When the car started, it made a loud noise.
-With all our materials, we sat down and stated doing our work
The 'ing' sentence
Try starting a sentence the 'ing' form of the verb. Swimming
Remember the rule: When you have a finished 'ing' phase, place a comma, then write the rest of the sentence.
Some words you can use: Listening, watching, running, reacting, realizing, emerging, grasping, speaking, analising, signalling, exposing
Examples:
-Realizing the danger, people fled from the cities
-Shaking away the nerves, he approached the microwave
-Emerging from the water, the swimmer was greeted with cheers
-Analising the board, the children worked out the math problems
-Realizing what I just did, i slowly freaked out
-Grasping the chair, I put it on the top of the desk as we packed our stuff up ready to leave