Essay #3

The 'ed' sentence

Try starting your sentence with the -ed form of the verb. H makes for a punchy start to a sentence.

Remember the rule: when you have finished your -ed phrase, place a comma then write the rest of the sentence. 

Some -ed words-surprised, excited, angered, possessed, committed, electrified, undaunted, overpowered, concerned, horrified, concerned, delighted, enrolled.

Examples

-Determined to win, Troy pushed himself in last last meters of the sprint.

-Concerned for the well being of others, the Prime minister passed new laws.

-Horrified by the gore, I turned away from the screen.

-Surprised by my parents, I jump in the new car they just got me.

-Overpowered with the ball in my hands, I throw the ball at the last person standing

-Committed to my work, I finish first and get to have free time.

The 'Power' sentence

 If you waffle a lot in your writing, try using a power sentence. Begin your paragraph with a power sentence of 12 words or less. Get straight to the point

Examples

-Money is the root of all evil (7)

-What is right, isn't always popular (6)

-She was elected as the president (6)

-He won his soccer game 1/4 (6)

-She did so well she got a pay rise (7)

-Running makes you tired (4)